First installment

So here is the very first part of my book that I'm working on. Read it, leave comments. I want to know how to make it better

Lynn Washington was glued to the television, never before had things escalated to this magnitude. There had been wars and technology failure but this topped it all, offensive war lasers aimed for the island of Korin backfired and demolished the island nation of Cartan. Right after the destruction an earthquake ripped through Raforen demolishing a high capacity power plant causing wide spread chaos. And to top it all off the last drops of Oil had been removed from the Southern Ice Fields leaving the earth void of any of the precious black liquid. Luckily Lynn’s home country of  Bethell had been saving up for such an incident, stockpiling oil for the past 7 years had yielded enough oil to last the country 10 years on minimum consumption, only 5 at the current consumption.

Lynn didn’t usually watch the news while waiting for the kids to come home but Lynn was concerned for her little family but also her husband, General Hal Washington, the highest ranking general in the Bethell army.

Out of the corner of her eye Lynn saw the bus pull up to the stop in front of the house, leaving her 3 youngest children, James, Rose and Emma to walk to the door.  Emma was pulling James and Rose by the hand, so excited to show her mom what she had made at school.

“Mommy, mommy, mommy, look we made butterflies with our hand prints at school,” at that point Emma jumped up on her mom’s lap and showed her the picture.

“That looks so good, why don’t you go hang it up on the fridge with all the other pictures you’ve made.” Lynn shifted her position to better see her school weary children. Just then the sound of Nicole coming home rang through the house. Nicole always came home with her boyfriend James on his fancy motorbike. Nicole and Lance met about a year ago and had been dating ever since then, even with Lynn making her distaste known to Nicole. Nicole never let that bother her, and constantly tried to find ways for her and Lance to be together.

Nicole and Lance ran to Nicole’s room where she had a bag packed and ready to go. Her plan would be finally put into action, she was running away and there was nothing her mother could do about it. it was all planned, they were going to go to the small mountain rang and live with Lance and his family. Nicole knew that she couldn’t leave with out facing her mother one last time. She took a deep breath right before she opened the door to her room to leave.

“You okay? Not having second thoughts are you?” Lance had this way of reading Nicole’s mind and stating it in such a way that i seemed the thought was no longer a problem.

“Nope I'm just fine, just preparing myself for facing my mother. She’ll probably hate me after this.”

“Don’t say that. she’s your mother. Lynn can be harsh but it’s because she loves you but you’ll always be her little girl.”

“Thanks, now let’s go, we’re burning daylight.” Nicole grabbed the bag and walked out the door only to find her mother standing sitting on the couch right by the front door.

“Where do you think you’re going?” Lynn slowly stud up.

“Mom Lance and I are going to visit his family down in the Coradian Mountains. We’re going to spend six months there then we’re going to travel the surrounding area for a month. After that we are going to get married and live down there,” Nicole knew her mother wouldn’t allow her to follow through with the plan but she had to try and see if her mother would reason with her.

“No,” Lynn’s response was short but firm. “No you are not going. You’re not going to marry this piece of trash. No. You can’t go. End of story.”

“Too bad. It’s all planned, we have been working on this for months.” Nicole was holding back the sheer frustration that was building in her. So she turned and her and Lance headed out the door.

Lynn stood up and blocked the door. “You are not going anywhere. You are going to say here, go to your room unpack and kiss your boyfriend goodbye. I will not let you go out there with all the crazy things that have been going on. Now go to your room.”

Nicole was determined on getting out of the house. “I’m not going to my room. you are treating this house like a prison. All you ever want is to prevent me from being happy. Dad’s gone and you’re miserable and now you try to make all of us as miserable as you,” Nicole’s words stung Lynn right down to the very core.

“Well if you feel that way fine! Leave... See if I care. You can just go off with your boyfriend, you slut. Don’t expect any remorse from me when you finally discover that he wasn’t worth it,” with that Lynn left her post at the front door and went to her room, defeated.

Lance slipped out the door and left Nicole alone with her siblings so she could say goodbye.

“Now look, don’t let anything I said effect you. I have to leave,” Nicole got on her knees and hugged Emma. “I love all of you and if you were in my shoes you’d know why I had to do it.”

“So... is Lance going to be my brother now? When are you going to come back? I’m going to miss you,” Emma’s sweet words tore at Nicole’s heart. how could a small child be able to comprehend so much.

“Don’t worry Em, I’ll be back soon. You take care of your brother and sister they need you,” with that Nicole set the little girl on the ground and turned to leave. “Rose, don’t forget you are one of the strongest girls I know, Don’t let the fear of losing keep you from reaching your dreams. I did and look where that landed me.”

James was next, but he was no where to be found. So Nicole turned and left through the front door to Lance who was waiting on the bike.

James heard the bike leave, he knew that would be one of the best moments to go console his distressed mother.  

Bryan Corbin was just sixteen when his father left him at a bus stop with nothing more than the clothes on his back. An only hour before Bryan was enjoying a dinner with his family. The food was exquisite and they never had food that great unless it was a celebration of some sort. After dinner Maxwell Corbin asked his son if he wanted to go for a walk. They left the house around seven; the bus was at the stop at seven thirty.

        “I would say I am sorry but I am not,” Maxwell sad with no compassion what-so-ever. “See ya kid hope you turn out well.” With that Maxwell left his oldest son. As Maxwell walked away an army issued buss pulled up.

        Bryan was in a trance. “Well you getting on or not, we have a schedule to keep?” the question came from the bus driver.

        “Ooh yeah,” Bryan slipped on and the doors closed behind him. “Where is this bus going anyway?”

        “Hah where are we going where are we going,” the driver gave him a queer look. “You really don’t know do you . . . this bus goes to military boot camp in Alaska.”

        Bryan slumped down in a bench, depressed and confused. How could his parents get rid of him so soon? He wasn’t even an adult yet. Why?